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Thanks for translating! :) A couple of suggestions:

"Me dice regresa y vuelve con rosa" is hard to translate because I don't think there's any English idiom that would use two synonyms for "come back" in the same sentence like that (and on a side note, judging by her English lyrics, I don't assume that Inna's Spanish lyrics are always perfectly idiomatic either). I would say something like "He says turn around and come back with a rose." Or, I don't know Spanish, but instead of the second person imperative "(tu) vuelve" could it instead be the third person indicative "(el) vuelve" -> He tells me to come back, and shows up with a rose"?

Again, you can't use both "despite" and "but" in the same sentence like that in English. I would just leave "but" out: "Despite his delicious kisses I'm not interested." (Although it's perfectly possible to call kisses "rich" in English, it's not a common idiom to use "rich" as an adjective for things like kisses the way it is in Spanish.)

Se pasan los días de lunes a viernes -> The days are passing, from Monday to Friday

Te decían cuidado que la pierdes -> They told you to be careful not to lose it
(I'm kind of just guessing here based on what would make sense.)